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Postby asa+kari » Monday January 25, 2010 9:37 pm

Umm.. hello. This is my first thread here. I hope this is allowed~!

For this thread's existence.. I'd love to showcase my artwork.. but I don't have any to personally present at the moment (the rest being non-ar tonelico based and showcased in my deviantART account). I hope to share my designs here in the future though.

First of all... the purpose of this thread's creation was to show my reyvateil creation progress. I had started this on another forum (Gaia Online).. but it might be wiser for me to continue development here so that I may receive more advice, suggestions, and encouragements here.

They do not have "names" yet.. but I hope to assign them names soon so that I may avoid continuing the labels I temporarily used to distinguish one character from another.

Original Desc: I hope this is appropriate to place this thread here since it's going to be my existing original creations in the long run. Haha.. I still haven't drawn my reyvateils fully yet, but I do have some ideas in mind how to draw them. I want to draw them in a light where they're regular reyvateils, but also holds a lot of sadness that lies deep in their cosmospheres.

I haven't compiled my personal text file yet, but I think it's suitable to place it here in the meantime. After some ideas in mind, I'll present some of the character sketches for each reyvateil. As they (except one) are Reyvateils, I have some ideas on how their cosmosphere and costume(s) will come out. It'll take a while, but I hope you're patient enough to follow through my development.
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development

Postby asa+kari » Monday January 25, 2010 9:38 pm

Reyvateil #1

Name: TBA
Age: Fairly young, but old enough to exhibit insecurities. Perhaps 13-15? She is also younger than her older, human sister.

History/Desc: When she was little, her mother and father left the village without disclosing any reasons. She and her older sister were promptly left in the care of relatives. Because their mother was a Reyvateil, both dreamt about being able to sing songs together. However, when her older sister reached the age of the possibility of becoming one, no changes occurred. After thorough examination, her sister was confirmed to be a human. At the time, she herself exhibited the symptoms of the Tattoolist disease. Due to the poor conditions of the village, the medicine was incredibly expensive. Fortunately, they were able to relieve the conditions, but it was only through her sister's jobs out in the city that allowed them to amass funds for the medicine. Compared to her older sister, she doesn't hold much confidence in herself and wondered why her sister wasn't a reyvateil (who she believes to be far more superior in singing than she could be).

Much of her cosmosphere and development would most likely lie in her insecurities and lack of confidence. She loves her sister dearly and wished very much for her older sister to sing instead of herself. Unfortunately, the songs won't reach the tower due to being classified as a human instead of being awakened as a Reyvateil.
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development

Postby asa+kari » Monday January 25, 2010 9:39 pm

Older Sister of Reyvateil #1

I know she's (currently?) not a Reyvateil. However, she has a central part in her story as well, especially her songs that her sister admires the most. I'm also assuming that despite the high rate of becoming a Reyvateil (mother being one, and was born a female), there's also a chance of her father's recessive genes to be dominant in her genetics.

Name: TBA

Age: Older than her younger sister. Probably 2-3 years older.

History/Desc: Same as her younger sister, her parents were forced to leave the village to earn money. They left their two daughters in the care of relatives who receives the parents' sum to care for the daughters.

When her younger sister exhibited symptoms of Tattoolist disease, she left the village promptly in order to find work to pay for the medicine. She tries her best to visit, but her visits tend to be short and infrequent. Regardless, her younger sister was patient and gained much morale thanks to her older sister's efforts. Her efforts paid off and was able to relieve her sister. Due to the expensive price on the medicine, she too left the village to earn money to pay for the medicine.

When she was a child, she and her sister loved singing songs together with their mother, who is a Reyvateil. Nowadays, as a human, her songs doesn't have a lot of power. Instead, she invests her time working in various part time jobs to help pay for her sister's medicine and to improve their life.

Her various part time jobs were difficult, but it gave her much experience in many areas. She also amassed a vast network that offered her much advantages and improvement to her lifestyle. Eventually, she brought her younger sister to the city as well and hopes to enroll her into a academy or perhaps hire a teacher to practice singing.

In combat, she could be considered as a vanguard as she isn't a Reyvateil. Her attacks aren't strong but she can throw several jabs at once. At most, her build is average but enough to keep the enemy at bay.

Like said, her younger sister admires her singing and would rather hear her older sister's songs than her own. This causes some complications for her as she wishes for her sister to gain confidence and sing.

On another note- the sisters left the village to the city in order to find their parents' whereabouts as well. Despite regular monthly sums, the return address was vague. Letters were received as well but again, location was vague. I'm wondering how to tie this in though (in regards to their parents' statues and whatnot).
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development

Postby asa+kari » Monday January 25, 2010 9:40 pm

Reyvateil #2

Name: Again, unknown. But, she is independent (an adult) of the other two characters.

Age: Mid-20s, perhaps. Any younger would result in experiences harbored dominantly during the teenage years (and therefore, a bit more superfluous to the significance of her plight). ^^;

History/Desc: Not much about her, except she is still undergoing depression because of the breakup of her previous relationship. I'm not quite sure about her boyfriend, but he delved close to.. LVL8 of her cosmosphere before terminating their relationship. Because she shared much of her emotions, story, and love with him, she became heartbroken as a result and her cosmosphere is assumed to be in a disarray ever since.

If there's ever a chance where another significant other appears in her life and dives, he'll presumably will face many complications as she developed numerous negative personas that'll attack him with her past, traumatic experiences in addition to their high standards on whether he'll can be the one she wants.

Aside from taunting, they'll most like put him in dangerous scenarios to see if he can bear her traumas with her.

Likely, cosmosphere LVL8 (or 9) will exhibit one of her previous, kinder personas blindfolded. This would be a test to see if he can gain her [trust] and guide her. He not only has to gain her [trust], but he also has to make her feel assured that she would be guaranteed safety with him. As her previous relationship ended around this level, she'll undoubtedly will put the most obstacles here in this level. At the same time, her LVL10 would be a very grand wedding where, unlike those that likes privacy, would be open to her other personas congratulating with well-wishes and praise. Other NPCs would be there as well, in a sense. Maybe her songs?

EDIT: Ahh now that I look at this.. it reminds me of the josei manga genre.. kind of ;;.
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development

Postby asa+kari » Monday January 25, 2010 9:43 pm

Now the "new development" below is disorganized and mostly follows the "older sister of reyvateil #1" and another related reyvateil "reyvateil client." I'll assign her a profile later.. probably joined with the "older sister of reyvateil #1's" post for continuity reasons. I also messed up some of the labels I assigned for the older sister. Sorry! D: I shall sort it out later!


Wow.. time goes by so fast! n__n;
At the moment, I'm trying to see if I can make not only more illustrations this year (hopefully with the zest that I enjoyed from late '05 and 07), but also flesh out many characters that had "existed" but never completely had an appearance to back it up...
Amongst the many characters I'm working on, I'm trying to finally work on my original reyvateils. ^^; The main issue is to adorn her in a way that makes her stand out enough not just for me, but also to onlookers. Uhh.. wait.. the one I'm working on is not really a reyvateil. D:


(new development!!)

She's the older sister of one.. but due to some circumstances from her various jobs (to pay for her younger sister's diquility), she settled into one where she plays as the double of her reyvateil client.

Her reyvateil client doesn't have much confidence in her voice and as a respected member in the society (well.. her parents are notably), she's often invited to sing for various occasions and parties. More than often, she's unable to refuse them because of her standing. However, due to a traumatic occasion where her singing was ridiculed (not directly.. but the aura wafted much gossip about it), she no longer possesses the will to craft and sing her own songs.

To her luck, she found someone that resembled her uncannily (er.. that's her vision anyway.. there's always slight differences since they're not twins), she immediately hired her. The older-sister-with-younger-sister-as-a-reyvateil was skeptical at first.. but the pay was good and enough to pay for the regular diquility for her younger sister. She also was offered lodgings, meals, and education (notably for hymmnos, mannerisms of the upper class, etc.). And so, she accepted the offer and became the double of a reyvateil. The only problem is that she's "human" (I'm wanting to make her as a reyvateil as well.. but that'd defeat the purpose of the placing difficulties for humans) and while she has a splendid singing voice, her human qualities aren't going to welcomed in the reyvateil sphere. In a sense, it's difficult to disguise the human girl as a reyvateil but, it worked for the most part due to the distance her reyvateil client had amongst the listeners in addition to the songs being non-combative or wholly passionate (those songs are likely to exhibit waves quite a bit.. I would think anyway).

Oh yeah. on a random note, the disguising of the human also included painting a (temporary?) tattoo of the install part for that rare, rare situation where her garments are unwillingly torn. It's just a safe precaution since there are likely to be many who "waste their time" trying to take down the upper class.
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With that above.. I'm not sure what tower that story would set in. Sol Ciel won't work very well since there isn't a upper class reyvateil society (and just has 2 spheres of respect developed from the isolation of Platina and the lower world).. Sol Marta miight be viable except the upper class is more or less solely focused on the holy Maiden(s). The last one is new and with the reyvateil dominance.. it just might work. It only makes it worse for the human sister because of her species ranking and how an actual reyvateil wants her assistance. Also, humans face the issue of aging.. something reyvateils aren't really hampered with so the human sister might not be able to retain the job as long-term. Her "voice" is likely to remain valuable to the reyvateil client though.
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Whew. That's a massive wall of text on my reyvateil plot/character development. Sorry. 8D;;


Possible lingering resentment attributed from society & class: (this development seems broken from above.. but this is the answer for a question Palsa-san asked ^^)

She (the reyvateil client) might harbor those feelings, although those won't be acknowledged outright because she did hire a double (who happens to be a human) in the first place. That doesn't mean those feelings aren't unheard- I think her future diver (if she permits him) might see those personally in her cosmosphere.

Perhaps, the reyvateil client would like to appreciate her human double for her efforts.. but she'd unthinkably would still address her human double's inferiority to beta types due to the norms of society. she'd probably say/mention it jokingly.. but her human double's more or less putting up with the "verbal harassment" for her sister's sake.. who too is looked down for being a third generation reyvateil dependent on diquility to survive.

If the human double WAS a reyvateil.. her cosmosphere will be a interesting sight to see. 8D;

Oh yeah, I decided to make the older sister a human because I thought that a hymmnos song duet with her little sister would be touching. The little sister possesses a inferiority complex as a third generation and a reyvateil who can't sing. It doesn't help that she idolizes her human sister's capabilities for singing and why she wasn't born a reyvateil.

Ahaha.. I should figure out names soon.. I'm tired of identifying them with their labels ahaha...
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development & creation

Postby Palsa » Tuesday January 26, 2010 6:43 am

Ah, I see you posted it here. ^_^
I'm a bit busy at the time to read all of it, but I'll look it over and comment on it tomorrow.
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development & creation

Postby asa+kari » Tuesday January 26, 2010 6:51 am

Palsa wrote:Ah, I see you posted it here. ^_^
I'm a bit busy at the time to read all of it, but I'll look it over and comment on it tomorrow.

Thank you~ >w<
Ahaha.. just about everything was cross-posted from the original thread in the guild so if you read/skimmed it originally.. it's pretty much the same as it was before. ^^;

I wasn't able to go and update the post(s) with the "new development" information though. I can probably do that tomorrow since I'd want to backup the information into my computer personally~
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development & creation

Postby asa+kari » Tuesday January 26, 2010 7:38 am

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Uh.. this is what I got of "older sister of reyvateil #1/reyvateil double" so far~
And ack.. her head came out a bit too big. 8D; I shall go and mend it in the morning.. the proportion isn't exactly appealing to me ahaha ;;.
This is far from final but came from a long way of being devoid of a working outfit. ^^;
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development & creation

Postby Palsa » Wednesday January 27, 2010 4:55 am

Nice artwork. ^_^
I wish I was good at drawing proportions. :^^;:

Just read everything, and I have a few suggestions for the characters.

Spoiler for "I'll post my comments as a spoiler to save space":  [ Open ]
For the Client, I suggest having her trauma take place at around level 6 of her Cosmosphere.
The reason I suggest that, is because 6 is generally a difficult point for the Reyvateil and partner to get through, and where the problems start to kick in, and its also considerably farther then most people would go.
I'm pretty sure that in Misha and Aurica's Cosmosphere's, it was a mistake that was made in level 6 that led to the problems, and in Ar tonelico II, after finishing the 5th Cosmosphere, you can't finish any of the other Reyvateil's Cosmosphere's.
Plus, if a new partner were to enter the picture, I think it would work best if he had more levels to go though.
One of the things that I remember hearing in conversations by Tenba NPC's, is that they would often get bored with all of, what they thought to be, trivial activities that the Reyvateil had them go through in the Cosmosphere.
That might also be a good reference for why her former partner left her.

For the Human Double, how about if it turned out that she really was a Reyvateil, but for some mysterious reason never officially awakened as one.
It could be caused by some sort of Cosmosphere disorder, since her younger sister has the tattoo disease, it could be a hereditary problem.
Also, in Ar tonelico II, Chroah had to enter Luca's Cosmosphere in order to dive into Chroche.
That might also be an interesting addition, since the elder sister is considered to be a human, if it were to turn out that she was actually a Reyvateil, and someone were to dive into her Cosmosphere through another Reyvateil, they might be able to resolve her problem.

Those are just a few thoughts and suggestions. ^_^

As for names, I haven't thought of anything to suggest as of yet.
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development & creation

Postby asa+kari » Wednesday January 27, 2010 7:16 am

Palsa wrote:Nice artwork. ^_^
I wish I was good at drawing proportions. :^^;:

Just read everything, and I have a few suggestions for the characters.

Spoiler for "I'll post my comments as a spoiler to save space":  [ Open ]
For the Client, I suggest having her trauma take place at around level 6 of her Cosmosphere.
The reason I suggest that, is because 6 is generally a difficult point for the Reyvateil and partner to get through, and where the problems start to kick in, and its also considerably farther then most people would go.
I'm pretty sure that in Misha and Aurica's Cosmosphere's, it was a mistake that was made in level 6 that led to the problems, and in Ar tonelico II, after finishing the 5th Cosmosphere, you can't finish any of the other Reyvateil's Cosmosphere's.
Plus, if a new partner were to enter the picture, I think it would work best if he had more levels to go though.
One of the things that I remember hearing in conversations by Tenba NPC's, is that they would often get bored with all of, what they thought to be, trivial activities that the Reyvateil had them go through in the Cosmosphere.
That might also be a good reference for why her former partner left her.

For the Human Double, how about if it turned out that she really was a Reyvateil, but for some mysterious reason never officially awakened as one.
It could be caused by some sort of Cosmosphere disorder, since her younger sister has the tattoo disease, it could be a hereditary problem.
Also, in Ar tonelico II, Chroah had to enter Luca's Cosmosphere in order to dive into Chroche.
That might also be an interesting addition, since the elder sister is considered to be a human, if it were to turn out that she was actually a Reyvateil, and someone were to dive into her Cosmosphere through another Reyvateil, they might be able to resolve her problem.

Those are just a few thoughts and suggestions. ^_^

As for names, I haven't thought of anything to suggest as of yet.

Thank you for the feedback, suggestions, and advice (and taking the time to do so) Palsa-san! I really appreciate it! All of this will be helpful during the development~~

Spoiler for .. there's new development derived from feedback and it's quite lengthy again~:  [ Open ]
Human Double as a Reyvateil: Many working workarounds you mentioned sounds very believable if I ever decide (or feel like) to authenticate the human double's "status" as a "reyvateil." If that scenario occurs... and if that ever gets leaked... the Reyvateil Client is sure to be infuriated that not only her double resembles her appearance, but is also a reyvateil (for that complex to occur... the Reyvateil Client would have to feel the airs of superiority.. which is easy to obtain due to her upbringing and society).

Ah.. as for the "tattoo disease" was just a coined name borrowed/used in the first tower. I'm not too sure of the second.. but the symptoms are generally the same. I'm not too sure of the third tower's endeavors and dealings with the so called "disease" amongst their 3rd generation.. but the diquility concept probably didn't arose until later due to the beta reyvateil supremacy ahaha. Then again.. with their technology.. perhaps they have a way to suppress the symptoms as the reyvateil named Mute is a living case herself. ^^;

The "cosmopshere disorder" sounds really interesting to delve into~ owo
The composition of her cosmosphere might also be a tad bit different than others since the development of her cosmosphere at large remained unpaved and perhaps.. "pure/clean" when the disorder was discovered. This could present problems (and interests to reyvateil-centric scientists) as the basic tower connection protocols aren't fully established during the initial dive (I guess it would resemble the forced invasion of Cocona's when she recently awoke as a reyvateil). So.. there's a potential of actually breaking her cosmosphere even without ill intent..
I have a feeling that the ones that do attempt diving into her may be some forceful/unruly "acquaintances" of the Reyvateil Client (with the thinking that the double they incidentally lured was technically a human with the install port painted on her skin LOL). Aw.. I feel bad for her already because while she could retaliate (posed as a temporary vanguard before her current position), she kept up with the charade just so she could afford to pay for her sister's diquility.
Using another reyvateil as a channel to enter another would also be used to re-enter the former human simply to decrease the risks of being terminated on the spot for both the diver and former human due to inner turmoil. 8D;;

Reyvateil Client: Your suggestion makes sense considering that the initial 5 levels would most likely involve trying to impress her partner and the like. Since she was raised in the upper class and possesses (at least outwardly) little negativity with herself, the progression would resemble Chroche and Misha's initial levels before losing her grip on her "masks."

Reyvateil #2: Your suggestion on the setting works quite well. I hadn't spared a thought on Tenba. I mean, I figure that there's at least some workers who aren't douche-bags like the ones lead by Board and related subordinates. However, because it's work.. some might feel reluctant to further the progress because the bearing of a reyvateil's emotional baggage might not be worth it (nor do they get extra incentives readily..). I'm not fully considering this scenario for her yet.. but it's plausible not to mention another take on the inner workings of Tenba (and perhaps the localities of the lower world haha). :'D


Ahaha.. like I mentioned earlier.. I appreciate your feedback. Thanks to that.. I made a lot of new possibilities. :yay:
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development & creation

Postby Palsa » Thursday January 28, 2010 2:20 am

asa+kari wrote:
Palsa wrote:Nice artwork. ^_^
I wish I was good at drawing proportions. :^^;:

Just read everything, and I have a few suggestions for the characters.

Spoiler for "I'll post my comments as a spoiler to save space":  [ Open ]
For the Client, I suggest having her trauma take place at around level 6 of her Cosmosphere.
The reason I suggest that, is because 6 is generally a difficult point for the Reyvateil and partner to get through, and where the problems start to kick in, and its also considerably farther then most people would go.
I'm pretty sure that in Misha and Aurica's Cosmosphere's, it was a mistake that was made in level 6 that led to the problems, and in Ar tonelico II, after finishing the 5th Cosmosphere, you can't finish any of the other Reyvateil's Cosmosphere's.
Plus, if a new partner were to enter the picture, I think it would work best if he had more levels to go though.
One of the things that I remember hearing in conversations by Tenba NPC's, is that they would often get bored with all of, what they thought to be, trivial activities that the Reyvateil had them go through in the Cosmosphere.
That might also be a good reference for why her former partner left her.

For the Human Double, how about if it turned out that she really was a Reyvateil, but for some mysterious reason never officially awakened as one.
It could be caused by some sort of Cosmosphere disorder, since her younger sister has the tattoo disease, it could be a hereditary problem.
Also, in Ar tonelico II, Chroah had to enter Luca's Cosmosphere in order to dive into Chroche.
That might also be an interesting addition, since the elder sister is considered to be a human, if it were to turn out that she was actually a Reyvateil, and someone were to dive into her Cosmosphere through another Reyvateil, they might be able to resolve her problem.

Those are just a few thoughts and suggestions. ^_^

As for names, I haven't thought of anything to suggest as of yet.

Thank you for the feedback, suggestions, and advice (and taking the time to do so) Palsa-san! I really appreciate it! All of this will be helpful during the development~~

Spoiler for .. there's new development derived from feedback and it's quite lengthy again~:  [ Open ]
Human Double as a Reyvateil: Many working workarounds you mentioned sounds very believable if I ever decide (or feel like) to authenticate the human double's "status" as a "reyvateil." If that scenario occurs... and if that ever gets leaked... the Reyvateil Client is sure to be infuriated that not only her double resembles her appearance, but is also a reyvateil (for that complex to occur... the Reyvateil Client would have to feel the airs of superiority.. which is easy to obtain due to her upbringing and society).

Ah.. as for the "tattoo disease" was just a coined name borrowed/used in the first tower. I'm not too sure of the second.. but the symptoms are generally the same. I'm not too sure of the third tower's endeavors and dealings with the so called "disease" amongst their 3rd generation.. but the diquility concept probably didn't arose until later due to the beta reyvateil supremacy ahaha. Then again.. with their technology.. perhaps they have a way to suppress the symptoms as the reyvateil named Mute is a living case herself. ^^;

The "cosmopshere disorder" sounds really interesting to delve into~ owo
The composition of her cosmosphere might also be a tad bit different than others since the development of her cosmosphere at large remained unpaved and perhaps.. "pure/clean" when the disorder was discovered. This could present problems (and interests to reyvateil-centric scientists) as the basic tower connection protocols aren't fully established during the initial dive (I guess it would resemble the forced invasion of Cocona's when she recently awoke as a reyvateil). So.. there's a potential of actually breaking her cosmosphere even without ill intent..
I have a feeling that the ones that do attempt diving into her may be some forceful/unruly "acquaintances" of the Reyvateil Client (with the thinking that the double they incidentally lured was technically a human with the install port painted on her skin LOL). Aw.. I feel bad for her already because while she could retaliate (posed as a temporary vanguard before her current position), she kept up with the charade just so she could afford to pay for her sister's diquility.
Using another reyvateil as a channel to enter another would also be used to re-enter the former human simply to decrease the risks of being terminated on the spot for both the diver and former human due to inner turmoil. 8D;;

Reyvateil Client: Your suggestion makes sense considering that the initial 5 levels would most likely involve trying to impress her partner and the like. Since she was raised in the upper class and possesses (at least outwardly) little negativity with herself, the progression would resemble Chroche and Misha's initial levels before losing her grip on her "masks."

Reyvateil #2: Your suggestion on the setting works quite well. I hadn't spared a thought on Tenba. I mean, I figure that there's at least some workers who aren't douche-bags like the ones lead by Board and related subordinates. However, because it's work.. some might feel reluctant to further the progress because the bearing of a reyvateil's emotional baggage might not be worth it (nor do they get extra incentives readily..). I'm not fully considering this scenario for her yet.. but it's plausible not to mention another take on the inner workings of Tenba (and perhaps the localities of the lower world haha). :'D


Ahaha.. like I mentioned earlier.. I appreciate your feedback. Thanks to that.. I made a lot of new possibilities. :yay:


No problem, hope it could be of some use. ^_^
By the way, I just had a thought about the sisters relationship with their parents.
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Perhaps their parents would have had a lot of expectations in the elder sister, believing that she was going to become a Reyvateil, but when she reaches the proper age, and doesn't show any sign of awakening, the praises would turn into resentment, even if its unintentional.
This could also be magnified if the younger sister, who they might not have had any expectations in, would actually become one.
Just another thought to consider. ^_^
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development & creation

Postby asa+kari » Thursday January 28, 2010 4:09 am

No problem, hope it could be of some use. ^_^
By the way, I just had a thought about the sisters relationship with their parents.
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Perhaps their parents would have had a lot of expectations in the elder sister, believing that she was going to become a Reyvateil, but when she reaches the proper age, and doesn't show any sign of awakening, the praises would turn into resentment, even if its unintentional.
This could also be magnified if the younger sister, who they might not have had any expectations in, would actually become one.
Just another thought to consider. ^_^


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Hmm.. that expectation could had existed due to their society. o:
While humans aren't (in general) very pleased with the reyvateil dominance.. it's still inherent that the efforts of reyvateils and their standing are quite high.
While the parents were happily married and lived together.. the happiness wasn't "consistent" due to the pressures of everyday life and remnants left by their society. Perhaps, in a way, they felt that if their daughters were born as reyvateils.. they might be able to receive more opportunities than humans. That prospect was crushed when their eldest daughter wasn't exhibiting any of the common symptoms of being converted as a reyvateil.

I'm not sure how their expectations arose.. but perhaps they ended up becoming exceedingly pessimistic parents as a result of both humans' and reyvateils' disapproval of the marriage between human and reyvateil in general (and therefore, those expectations arose in attempt to not only preserve their family's well-being but also to establish themselves comfortably in the long run for their daughters).

.. I still hadn't figured out WHY the parents left though. =|
And the relatives they relied may either be "kind, reliable ones" or a "last resort" case. it depends on each sister's take, I guess and most likely be a topic in the cosmosphere.


Well.. thank you for your suggestion! <3
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development & creation >> feedback?

Postby asa+kari » Monday February 01, 2010 8:10 am

WIP of my first color picture of "reyvateil client" and her "double."

Spoiler for I hope I can come up with the rest of the colors soon..:  [ Open ]


I hope I can settle on a working color scheme for them soon. Clashing colors doesn't always work and I tend to lean towards that simply because it's not as boring to do in my traditional work.
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development & creation >> feedback?

Postby Palsa » Monday February 01, 2010 7:19 pm

asa+kari wrote:WIP of my first color picture of "reyvateil client" and her "double."

Spoiler for I hope I can come up with the rest of the colors soon..:  [ Open ]


I hope I can settle on a working color scheme for them soon. Clashing colors doesn't always work and I tend to lean towards that simply because it's not as boring to do in my traditional work.


Wow, that looks really awesome! ^_^
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development & creation >> feedback?

Postby Fayharn » Saturday February 06, 2010 4:30 pm

Palsa wrote:
asa+kari wrote:WIP of my first color picture of "reyvateil client" and her "double."

Spoiler for I hope I can come up with the rest of the colors soon..:  [ Open ]


I hope I can settle on a working color scheme for them soon. Clashing colors doesn't always work and I tend to lean towards that simply because it's not as boring to do in my traditional work.


Wow, that looks really awesome! ^_^


:D I agree with Palsa~ It looks Awesome~
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Re: [asa+kari] - reyvateil development & creation >> feedback?

Postby asa+kari » Monday February 08, 2010 7:34 am

Fayharn wrote:
Palsa wrote:
asa+kari wrote:WIP of my first color picture of "reyvateil client" and her "double."

Spoiler for I hope I can come up with the rest of the colors soon..:  [ Open ]


I hope I can settle on a working color scheme for them soon. Clashing colors doesn't always work and I tend to lean towards that simply because it's not as boring to do in my traditional work.


Wow, that looks really awesome! ^_^


:D I agree with Palsa~ It looks Awesome~

Thank you~! :'D
I hope I can finish it soon~
I added the younger sister (reyvateil) into the picture so more or less, they're the main character(s) I'm going to focus on.
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Re: [asa+kari] reyvateil creation > feedback? & new WIP

Postby asa+kari » Saturday September 11, 2010 9:16 am

uwaa.. I'm.. alive?

Anyhow.. the picture I started in February finally got some progress this week haha. For a while, I actually had forgotten about the sketch or just let it sit there.. which is a good thing because I had improved since then~

And.. what you see below in the spoilers box is what I have so far progress-wise. C:

Spoiler:  [ Open ]


In the end.. the sketch more or less is going to have a little more than what a sketch drawing would have. I also changed the canvas size so I can put in far more detail than the original size would allow me to and yet.. I had forgotten that said details would vanish indefinitely because of shrinking the image lool.

And despite this.. the three still have no names and I'm still debating whether the girl who plays as a reyvateil double happens to be a reyvateil whose abilities were dormant or something. Her little sister (the floating short one) is still a reyvateil though~
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Re: [asa+kari] reyvateil creation > feedback? & new WIP

Postby Palsa » Sunday September 12, 2010 12:41 am

asa+kari wrote:uwaa.. I'm.. alive?

Anyhow.. the picture I started in February finally got some progress this week haha. For a while, I actually had forgotten about the sketch or just let it sit there.. which is a good thing because I had improved since then~

And.. what you see below in the spoilers box is what I have so far progress-wise. C:

Spoiler:  [ Open ]


In the end.. the sketch more or less is going to have a little more than what a sketch drawing would have. I also changed the canvas size so I can put in far more detail than the original size would allow me to and yet.. I had forgotten that said details would vanish indefinitely because of shrinking the image lool.

And despite this.. the three still have no names and I'm still debating whether the girl who plays as a reyvateil double happens to be a reyvateil whose abilities were dormant or something. Her little sister (the floating short one) is still a reyvateil though~


That looks incredible, you've done an amazing job! ^_^
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Re: [asa+kari] reyvateil creation > feedback? +more WIP progress

Postby asa+kari » Thursday September 16, 2010 8:53 am

(to the previous reply) Thank you Palsa!

... and now I bring another update. It's nearly done.. but I'm at loss on how I'm supposed to make the background for the bottommost character.
Therefore.. I appreciate it if you have any suggestions. Otherwise.. I'll make due with what I have and hope I come across something.

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I'm glad I waited for several months (more like.. put aside or forgotten) since I wouldn't have thought of going beyond the sketch phase for this. :3
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Re: [asa+kari] reyvateil creation> feedback?+almost done!illust

Postby b_alasdair » Thursday September 16, 2010 2:40 pm

:shockblink3:
Are you... a professional artist by chance?
You're really good.
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